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Originally Posted by miraclebelow
Bro ilock, i came across this story when it was still 10 pages worth of read here. I stopped completely because i wanted to read everything in one go. Im so glad i did. I reread everything from page 1 right up to the end in 2 days. By far the best writer in sbf (my biased opinion of course)
I know most bros felt Yiling's death was a pity, but i felt it was a good touch. Unfortunate that jackson and yiling couldnt develop what they felt even more though. The whole yvonne-teng scenario felt like one of those 'filler' episodes, maybe teng could have played a bigger role instead of his lackey guo. Also, color me surprised when jackson fought on almost equal levels as butcher and eyeballs.
But bro, cheers for the amazing story! Now its going to be a 'rest of 2020' moment of silence for yiling's passing. Cant wait for the next masterpiece!
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Thank you for the compliment and your comments
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Yes, the Yvonne-Teng Arc feels like a filler and i would take note to avoid such an instance in future works.
Still trying to strike a balance between giving enough details and background and still keeping the story light enough so it don;t feel draggy.
